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These days people in some countries are living in a “throw-away” society which means people use things in a short time and then throw them away. What are the causes of this and what problems it might lead to?

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Pollution is one of the biggest problems in the present age. And
people
 all around the world even to
this
 day are living in a “throw-away” society. Some
people
 assert that pollution is not a big problem, because they do not see consequences, whereas many other argue that every unnecessary usage of plastic or other material is bad. Personally, I am in
favor
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 of the latter view.
First
 and most important, a lot of used
items
 tend to be thrown away into the ocean.
For instance
, plastic straws, cups, plates, and bags. In many cases, plastic straws will be eaten by fish or bigger animals, because they will mix it with their food. And that not only lead to sickness but
also
 to extinction. It is obvious that factors that make a lot of one-usage
items
 really pollute the air.
For example
, a lot of these
items
 come from China, and we all know that air in China has so many chemicals, that
people
 even to
this
 day wear masks.
On the other hand
, some products cannot be used again because of the bacteria they are caring. Let’s take into consideration medical gloves. Doctors, surgeons, and nurses fight many different diseases every day and they have to change their gloves with every patient because every person's immunity system is different and doctors have to make sure that every patient is safe. In conclusion, many
people
 are still using
items
 that are one-time use and that not only pollute our planet but
also
 increase the chances of animal extinction. Well obviously, there are some things that are medically mandatory to change after every usage, but
that is
 just a small part of all things that are wasted.
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