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We live in a world of techgnology theses days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems interms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

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Recently, there have been arguments that we live in a society of
technology
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 merits for our life.
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the
control
 and
security
 of information are out of the merits. I
partically
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partially
particularly
 agree with
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 because of two reasons.
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,
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technology
techgnology
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technology
make
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makes
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 our life easier for
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searching
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searching
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for informations
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informations
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information
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 whatever you want, constantly
people
 can contact
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other
people
moreover
, it is
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possible
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possible
 to
control
 so many systems through
technology
. In
present
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 era, we cannot live without
technologies
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technology
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 due to present
people
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delay
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delay
much
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technologies
 every day.
In addition
, there are huge advantages to
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using
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technologies
such
 as
technology
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the technology
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 of hospitality which makes us live much longer than
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in old
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 times.
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 many situations,
technology
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 able to help our society and protects us.
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,
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technology
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 much
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influence
influences
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influence
 to steady our life longer.
Secondly
,
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the disadvantages
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 of using
technologies
 which are
control
 and
security
.
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 things always come up some demerits as well, generally. These disadvantages are one of
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our
theams
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themes
teams
 for political things as well. Along
to
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developing
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developing
 the
security
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skills
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skills
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harkers
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 skills
also
 have improved.
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, it is hard to keep
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safety
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safe
 to
use
technology
. From
this
 situation, we should
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divide
deivide
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decide
 situations which is possible to
use
technology
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people
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believe
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believe
 that
the
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technology
is much relate
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 to
a
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 world as new things though, no
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one
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ones
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one
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 say that it is
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safe
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safe
 to
use
 because
for
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of
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control
 and
security
 issues.
People
 should divide situations and consider
to
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use
it
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