In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a results od eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food

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industry has grown
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, especially when it comes to chains of fast
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. The presence of fast
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restaurants all around the world increased health
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diseases
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diseases
among individuals and
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the
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availability
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availability
of junk
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.
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my point of view, the
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has to take
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into
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sector to reduce the
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of clients who are searching for a cheap meal and
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encouraging
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encourage
people to eat
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a local bistrò
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the city
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, they should increase the tax on meat production and give
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on meals at local restaurants.
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a reaction from fast
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food's
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chains, and
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I don't want to imagine what can happen.
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, after the intervention of
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, the fast
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industry can still reduce the money for
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production and give us worse
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. There could be some
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that I'm not considering right now,
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lawsuit. In conclusion, I rely on my
government
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and I'm convinced that they are already thinking about
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problem, in order to guarantee better health conditions
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their citizens.
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, I think
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not easy to deal with the big powerful lobby of fast
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food
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, because they have a lot of weight on the economy,
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I encourage
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government
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of each state to collaborate and find a solution together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • fast food consumption
  • higher tax
  • discourage
  • government intervention
  • tax revenue
  • health promotion programs
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • negative effects
  • healthcare
  • fast food companies
  • healthier options
  • offset the cost
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