some people believe that allowing children to make thier own choices on everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes.other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays some
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think letting
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choose their personal matters lead to selfishness,while others believe that
children
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decisions
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in some issues
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shouldnt
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believe is it really important to let them
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decisions
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for their
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. some
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might believe young
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do not have enough experience to choose what is
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best for their
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and future,
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having them to do these choices is problematic. they think that these
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lead them to become inconsiderate
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society and other
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and
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their wishes only and when they are grown up,
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of having
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sympathy
toward others, they would be a selfish person who
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not appreciate
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hardworking and co-working. having youngsters
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make
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for their daily
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is really important, though. they learn how to analyse situations, think of possibilities and alternatives, choose the best path and face the
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consequences
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. even though they make the wrong decision it is not meaningless because they would learn lessons through it and try harder to make a better choice
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time. they would be familiar with other options and become aware
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daily
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works and become mentally stronger,
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and productive.
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, being able to choose for
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when about minor things
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as clothes, will affect
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personality. they would believe they are capable of doing complex duties so when they are adults they would be independent and
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not need to rely on other
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, a study
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Cambridge university shows giving permission
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to
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children
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to make
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for their basic matters
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their
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improve their
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and help them to have enough
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for facing
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situation in adulthood. considering these,
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this
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issue might be
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children
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in the way that they would
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priorities
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upon
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society,
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believe
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should be able to choose
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their
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simple issues in their
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because how it would be encouraging and
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them to be a successful person in the future and teach them even a
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failure
is a way for getting closer to
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succeeding
success
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