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It is commonly said that the increased business between countries has a great impact on the the culture and the country’s identity in itself. Do you agree of disagree?

#business #countries #impact #culture #country’s #identity
In the era of globalization, in which the world is considered to be a global village, the
expand
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 of international trade is inevitable. I strongly believe that
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 trend has
great
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 positive impact on countries’
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culture
cuture
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culture
 and its
people
life style
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lifestyle
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.
Firstly
,there is no doubt that a big part of cross-
cultrual
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cultural
 activities and international business focus on
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the exchange
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 of technology .
This
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 exchanges help
people
 who are living in
underdevelped
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underdeveloped
 states to access
to
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cutting-edge
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technology
technolgy
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technology
 and
high level
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 information .
Thus
 the quality of life will improve in
underprivilaged
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underprivileged
ereas
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areas
seas
.
Moreover
, the export of science and
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technology
tecknolgy
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technology
 helps the pioneers and leading industries to get their needs in
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exchange
exchane
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exchange
 so
boat
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 side
benefit
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 from
this
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 transactions.
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, technology transfer from overseas, gave hope to Africa to invest significantly in research and development to overcome poverty.
Secondly
, the strong business relationship has a knock-on- effect on increasing
intractions
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interactions
interaction
 between
people
 from different nations and
consequently
 cultural
transmssions
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transmissions
transmission
. Successful communications across
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country
contry
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country
 borders
provides
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 an opportunity
to
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the
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underdeveloped states to learn about the cultures and lifestyles of the more developed ones and
thus
 improve their condition. In
this
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these
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intractions
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interaction
interactions
people
 may put aside their
tostereotypes
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stereotypes
to stereotypes
 and prejudices that
prevents
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individuals
indivituals
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individuals
 from understanding their weak points. To conclude,
the
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foreign exchange brings benefits to the
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countries
contries
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countries
 involved by improving
the
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technology
technolgy
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technology
, science and
accordingly
 identity of them.
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