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Band 4

in the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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 assume that in
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 years,
people
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 will not buy printed newspapers or
books
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 as they can easily find out and read when they want from
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internet
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 without any fee. But there are different types of audiences and some prefer to read print out ones rather than reading from
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internet
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 or electronic
books
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. Some
people
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 prefer to read printed
books
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 or
newspaper
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newspapers
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instead
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 of electronic
books
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. It is because in some countries, especially developing countries and undeveloped ones,
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internet
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 is not available in every part of the country and there are poor
internet
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 lines. So they cannot rely totally on online to read or search for the
books
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 that they want to read. And there are some
people
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 who
has
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 optical problems and cannot look at electronic screens for long hours.
For bookworms
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 optical diseases
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 to depend on
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printed
books
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 as they like to spend most of their
times
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time
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 reading. So there is still demand
for
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printed
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 in some countries and the printing industry will still remain. Nowadays, most younger generations depend on electronic devices and
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internet
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the internet
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. And they prefer to search on
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internet
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 for what they want to read
instead
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 of going to the book shops and
look
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 for the book. In their opinion, it is waste of time and money to go to
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bookstores. Because
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internet
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 offers a wide range of
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 and can easily search within few minutes. But there is no guarantee that all
books
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 will offer free of charge and some of the ancient
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 especially
literature
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the literature
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 of some rare ethnic might not be able to find
from
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on
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online
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the online
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platform
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.
As
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a
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conclusion, there is potential that in future, there will be less demand
in
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 reading printed
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 or newspapers, but they will not totally disappear from the world.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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