The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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Improvement Suggestions
2The essay presents an identifiable structure with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, some arguments could benefit from more sophisticated transitions and clearer topic sentences to enhance the logical flow.
The essay addresses the task directly with a clear position throughout. Increasing the complexity of ideas with deeper analysis and a wider range of perspectives could improve the response further.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.