Some people think that schools should give prizes for academic successes. Others argue that it is more important for schools to give prizes for other achievements (for example, for sports, music and behaviour). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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prizes
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and skills.
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on the perspective view and give a personal opinion as well.
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, in my ,opinion
schools
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prizes
for the other achievements of kids.
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Schools
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as sports and music. it
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important for the kids to focus on the different
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their country on the national
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.
for instance
, in
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city
schools
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students
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talent in sports departments. city school
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number one batmans of Pakistan Babar Azam.
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, mostly of
people
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prizes
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their skill.
such
as
schools
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confidence to their
students
to work hard on their natural talents .
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the
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schools
reward
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the
students
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talents in singing . to illustrate, when my cousin was in 6
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. he was very
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singing
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school give him
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so now he's the best singer in the world
on the other hand
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people
argued that
give
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prizes
for their education is more important rather than giving rewards
on
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for
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their skills.
such
as if
schools
give
prizes
to the
students
for their grades so
students
do more hard work in
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their studies
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. they get their
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and handsome salaries.
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if someone
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good
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in
their
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apply
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secondary
schools
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school
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so he'll get scholarships for high
educations
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education
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.
furthermore
, some believe that giving
prizes
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the
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academic achievement
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more
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. because
schools
motivate their
students
for
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their good grades in academic so
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the country
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get
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good doctors and It managers as well. to sum up, on the one side
people
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give
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giving
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prizes
for academic purpose is more important and
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side of
people
believe that
give
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rewards for skills and talents are more important. in my opinion, giving
prizes
to the
students
who have
naturally
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talent . they can
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their country as well and that good
give
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confidence to their passions
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