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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are causes? And what will be effects on society?

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As we come into the new millennium, there is an ongoing trend among the young generations that they tend to eschew science-based subjects in favour of other social majors. In my opinion, the limiting future opportunities and highly demanding requirements of science fields are the roots of
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 a phenomenon and I hold a view that society would suffer from various significant downsides. On the one hand, myriad factors are to blame for the shortage of science learners. To commence with, most science-related subjects like biological technology or computer science usually require students to not only get far accurate outcomes but
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 rigorously check their work since one inadvertent mistake could result in tremendous repercussions.
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, learners are usually forced to work long hours even to midnight or at the weekends in order to fulfil a combination of constant assignments and countless times of conducting experiments, which are the cornerstone of most hypotheses.
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, they could be dragged into burn-out contexts and shoulder a great psychological burden, as well as some serious physical and mental illnesses
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 as fatigue, depression or even stroke. Another key consideration is that students usually have to isolate themselves to put all concentration on their research, which may deprive them of getting access to up-to-date news coverage or fueling family bonds.
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 phenomenon
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 triggers loads of problematic aspects.
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 and foremost, as the number of scientific learners is on the wane compared to other crucial majors
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 as finance, art or pedagogy, there would be a lack of future workforces, which may prevent human beings from pursuing better living conditions as well as technological advancement. Specifically,
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 phenomenon would lessen a variety of technological breakthroughs and inventions, whereby, in some urgent cases like the Covid-19 pandemic, if there were not any specialists finding out defensive methods, both human beings and the surrounding environment may be completely destroyed in worst-case scenarios. Another noteworthy mention is that due to the accelerated proliferation of graduates from less stressful fields, there may be a risk of employment crisis and raising the opportunities for nefarious deeds. In conclusion, I personally believe that the tough requirements of scientific subjects are some major culprits begetting a host of undesirable impacts on society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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