Nowadays many young people spend their free time in shopping centers. This has a negative effect on youths and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued these days a lot of teenagers going to
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shopping
plaza
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in their spare day have a bad influence on
teens
and the public. I agreed that spending hour on shopping has a bad shock on adolescents and the public.
Teens
using their free hours in the shopping centres is a waste of money. Teenagers lost a lot of many money in shopping centres.
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, the results of Thailand shopping centres show that 80% of their income and profits come from
teens
, while the rest of the profits is 20%. Teenager downgrades their score in school by their free day in shopping malls,
instead
of studying. Many
teens
who go to shopping plazas after school, have their performance downgraded. The study by Oxford University shows results of
admission
spending a week in a shopping
plaza
and
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spending a week on studying . The results are day and night
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who go to the
plaza
perform 59% lower than
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who spend their free week studying. They are bad influencers on offspring and society. offspring look up to adolescents what they do shocks the kids and our public.
For instance
, a lot of youngsters already made a bad brunt on kids by teaching them to spend more hours in the
plaza
and less hour studying, but
also
brunt the offspring of our public leading to a bad society. In conclusion, teenagers that go shopping when they have free date waste their money and dates in study to get a better score,
also
the offspring of our society and the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer culture
  • Materialism
  • Youth culture
  • Commercialization
  • Passive consumption
  • Social conformity
  • Economic stimulation
  • Financial literacy
  • Sedentary behavior
  • Local enterprises
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Intellectual stimulation
  • Alternative pastimes
  • Community engagement
  • Peer influence
  • Escapism
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