Sales companies often try to recruit people who are motivated by money, as they believe that it will make them work harder. do you believe people are motivated to work hard by money and what other factors should be considered when searching for new sales staff?

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often consider that monetary
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can help to achieve
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output from a
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, outlook, education and prior experience cannot be overlooked while hiring someone.
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following paragraphs will talk about
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both perspectives in detail. On the one hand, being wealthy enough to be able to feed your family and provide them with the basic need of
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life is always
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by an individual,
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luring someone with
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tempting incentives and salary can get the best out of a
person
. If you have a roof
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the top, food to eat,
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to educate your
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you would not be all the time worried and can focus more on your duties which in turn will yield more profit for the company.
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, most managers don't mind staying late to complete their tasks.
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earlier work experience is
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the
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employers prefer to hire a
person
with already good command
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their work so that, they can immediately start and there would be no need of orientation sessions and waste of time. In conclusion, higher salaries and
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commissions can move a
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organization
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for more productivity but, in the long term
interest
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the degrees a
person
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years’
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experience
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they have must be kept in mind.
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