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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether museums are places to spend your leisure time or the main purpose is education. In
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 I am going to present both views and give my opinion. Some people tend to think that the most important thing
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museums is to let everyone relax and
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 because it will let them overcome stress. One of the
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 enough pressure in everyday life and information flow
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 erroneous, it all can even lead to depression, that’s why visiting cultural places like that may help to deal with it.
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, by looking at historical
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 or art pieces
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 can abstract and forget about worries, it helps to rest and generate new powers to prevent emotional burnout.
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, others insist that cultural institutions need to be visited, because of the importance of being educated. Modern technology is taking place over the world and people tend to spend their free time online rather than visiting museums, it mostly affects teenagers that’s why
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 of them aren’t versed in history and art. Some people are afraid that
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 generation will have nothing to tell their descendants due to the lack of education in culture. Having considered both views, I am convinced that each statement is right and in my
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 it would be more useful if they were connected together.
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 that, it would be beneficial from the side of education and entertainment.
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