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In recent time, many people are making the decision to live alone what are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negative effect on society?

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people are preferring to stay alone in
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lake
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 of freedom
of
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home
, it has
been
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more negative effects on society as addiction
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 laws. The primary reason for the said trend is
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 absence of freedom at
home
 and
this
 absence compel them to leave
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home
.
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 away from
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 parents,
give
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 them chance to choose a task according to their own without
guidance
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 of
father
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their father
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 and mother. While staying at
home
, they have to abide by all the
rules
 and
regulation
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 made by their elders which
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sometime
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 beyond their
wish
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, because
this
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, it is compulsory to take permission
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guardian
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a guardian
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 before leaving the
home
 and they are required to
impim
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imam
about
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 their
task
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tasks
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 to
family
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the family
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.
For example
, a survey
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 reviled that 90% of the population
leave
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their
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due to restrictions imposed by families on them.
This
 creates a negative effect on
the
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society when
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 can easily
made
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 mistakes
such
 as drug addiction and violation of
rules
.
This
 is because they get independence which they never
have
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 before and
this
 encourages them to do wrong tasks adoption. Staying away from guardians
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 anxiety and to remove
this
 they use drugs to remove all worries and stress which reduces their thinking levels so they
prone
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 to violate
rules
,
for instance
, in
USA
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, 90% of the students who live away from their parents are addicted to drugs and always brake the traffic
rules
. In conclusion, I reiterate that a lack of freedom and restrictions imposed by elders are
of
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the main reason to leave
house
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the house
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.
As a result
,
this
 is impacting society negatively as they tend to commit crimes.
This
 can be overcome by educating elders and youngsters about modern and changing relations.
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