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In recent years, pressure on school and university students has been increasing and they are pushed to work very hard from a young age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Over the
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 few years, there has been an increasing amount of
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 that schools and universities put on
students
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. They are motivated to
study
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 hard at an early age. In my opinion, I believe that
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 is a negative development for a number of reasons that will be outlined below
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, pushing
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 to
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 hard at a young age can put a lot of
pressure
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 on them. A kid should be given the right to enjoy his childhood and make beautiful memories during
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 phase
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 of being made to focus on his educational performance. A recent
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 published by Harvard University showed that people who can not experience their childhood completely will have a tendency to feel extremely regretful when they grow up.
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, it is parents' responsibility to ensure that their children have a beautiful childhood
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, when being forced to
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 intensively at an early age, people usually suffer from mental disorders,
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 depression or anxiety when they reach adulthood.
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, they distance themselves from others as well as hurt themselves to lessen the pains they feel. A recent poll conducted at a University in Miami suggested that 80% of
students
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 voted for
pressure
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 from parents' expectations as the main reason for their depression.
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, parents need to pay attention to their children's well-being more
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 of their scores In conclusion, I believe that putting
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 on
students
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 as a motivator for them to
study
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 is a negative development since it makes them feel regretful and suffers from mental disorders

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