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some people believe that certain old buildings should be preserved more than others.what type of old buildings should be preserved. do you think the advantages of preserving old buildings outweigh the disadvantages

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Today, we live in a
world
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 of modern architecture where the old
buildings
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 and monuments have been left with no significance for many but for some, it denotes the rich history of that particular land. I personally believe, that many of the old
buildings
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 are of greater importance and should be taken care of appropriately. In the following essay, I would like to reason about the preservation of some old
buildings
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 and not all of them.
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, I would like to stress that some historical monuments are of greater importance than others and the former should be taken care of.
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, the great ’Taj
Mahal’
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 is one of the seven wonders of the
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 and is the most beautiful architecture of ancient times. It shows the rich culture of that place and the many stories that it tells which fascinates the whole
world
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. India is known by the Taj Mahal and people from all over the globe come here to see the breathtaking monument that was built by the masons of those times. But, some
buildings
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 are of no historical significance and are not dominant in today’s
world
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.
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, the old forts were built by the people and were destroyed during the wars and only the residue of the building remains can be abolished. In the place of these
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 many other objects can be built which would be of greater use to people living now. To sum up, I can firmly say that conserving some of the old
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 and monuments definitely has its edge and should be followed in the coming time
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 so that everyone knows about their history and culture. As the saying goes ‘old is gold’ which
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me teaches us that, no matter how astonishing contemporary architecture is, it cannot match the beauty of ancient marvels of the
world
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preservation
  • architectural heritage
  • cultural significance
  • historical value
  • conservation
  • heritage sites
  • monuments
  • iconic buildings
  • tangible history
  • economic benefits
  • technological advancements
  • educational value
  • tourism industry
  • identity and continuity
  • construction techniques
  • social norms
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