Technology has impacted on the way people interact. These days, many relationships are created and maintained through technologies such as mobile, telephones and the internet. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using technology to establish and develop relationships?

Nowadays people are socializing
through
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online with the help of social
media
platforms,
although
it has pros and cons. I believe positives have
upper
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hand in comparison with
negative
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negatives
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which have been depicted in
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essay.
To begin
with
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social interactions widely do favours for an individual who is an introvert,
however
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he might not be a
person
who can
talks
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in a crowd but he will be able to talk when
in
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internet
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the internet
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. How does it help a reserved
person
? Social interaction
in
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is
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most important for the
wellbeing
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well-being
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of a
person
the more the number of relationships he/she has will eventually help the
person
from mental health issues. For an instance, most of my friends are having fear to face
public
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however
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, when it comes to online they are comfortable
to sing
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,
dance
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or
act
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and
post
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it in
the
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social forums without hesitation which gradually
release
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fear
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of facing
public
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.
In addition
, the major positive is considered to be interacting with different people around the world and understanding their culture, language and much more. Networking with different nationalities favours individuals to improvise their language which can even help the
person
to migrate and settle in that respective country.
For example
, one of my classmate who is a big fan of Spanish football somehow found a
person
in
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country with his sheer guts he learned the regional language and flew to Spain recently,
this
might not be possible if social
media
does not
exists
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.
On the other hand
, regular usage of social
media
can cause addiction eventually it can bring danger, the biggest problem is that individuals
starts
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to forget how to communicate with
outside
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world because of
limitless
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usage of online platforms
this
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can even cause social anxiety and serious mental issues. To sum up, there are certain demerits
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using social
media
however
, merits are having an edge over it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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