The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The two maps illustrate how the
centre
of a small town Islip
are
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is
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going to
develope
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develop
from the current situation to the future.
Overal
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, the maps demonstrate strong evidence
and
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that
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a lot of new
building
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buildings
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are going to change in the future.
According to
the
plan
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the
centre
of
a
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the
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small town Islip
are
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is
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going to
modernized
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dramatically and
totaly
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totally
. First of all, the Main Road
demolished
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was demolished
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and built the around comfortable Dual carriageway connecting
western
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the western
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and eastern sides
town
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of town
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.
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was.
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Instead
shops
buit
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built
shopping
centre
. The Bus station and Car
Park
are going to
buid
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build
near
Shopping
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the Shopping
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centre
. Housing
were
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was
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cleared in order to
buid
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build
new housing
several
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in several
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place
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places
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near
car
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the car
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park
, near
Park
. Between Bus Station, Shopping
centre
and Car
park
on the one side and shops are going to build
Pedestrians
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for Pedestrians
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only.
According to
the developing
plan
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shool
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school
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Shool
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School
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and
Park
steadly
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steadily
remained. One particularly
interisting
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interesting
fact in the developing plan demonstrate is
not
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no
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road
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a road
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connecting between
north
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the north
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and south side.
Countyside
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Countryside
located
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is located
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in
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on
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the north side.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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