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Every student should have spent a year working full-time before they start studying at university

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Students
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 have to choose whether they want to
study
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 at the
university
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 immediately after high
school
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 or take a gap and start working before studying. For some
students
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 it is too early to
study
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 again without any gap or
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experience
experiance
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experience
 and for someone is one year too much and they want to
study
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 immediately after high
school
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. Working full-time before studying at
university
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 has some positive aspects like making some
money
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.
However
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on the other hand
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 there are some disadvantages like procrastination after
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a year
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 without
school
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.
First
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 of all, when
students
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 choose to
work
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 full-time, they can make some
money
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 and be more independent. It would be easier for them to pay the bills
for example
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 rent. Another important benefit can be that it can help young
people
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 to choose
right
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 place where they want to
work
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 for the rest of their life or it can
helps
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help
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 in deciding where to
study
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.
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, in
this
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 stage of
life
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 it is important to get some new contacts for the future and meet new
people
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. Another reason why
students
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 should
work
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 before studying is that they can travel abroad and find
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a workplace
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workplace
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work
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 there or learn something about
cultures
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the cultures
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off
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 different countries, to be more specific, when
students
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 visit plenty of
place
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places
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 they can learn
new
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a new
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 language and improve their
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skills
sklils
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skills
. Due to
this
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, young
people
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 after high
school
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 could be more sociable.
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 at the question from
different
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a different
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 perspective
it
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apply
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can
also
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 have some negative aspects too.
For
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example
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 many
of
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apply
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students
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 have problems with procrastination and if they take a gap between high
school
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 and
university
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 it might be difficult to get used to
do
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 homework and
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study
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studying
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 for
the
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apply
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exam. Some
people
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 may say that it is difficult to
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concentrate
concetrate
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concentrate
 or learn something new in
school
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. What is more, young
people
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 are happy when they make some
money
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 and when they become independent so it is harder for them to get used to the fact that they are dependent on
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their parents
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parents
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parents'
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 income or less
money
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 from
part-time
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the part-time
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 job
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then
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than
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 before.
Furthermore
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, some young
people
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 want to finish
their
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apply
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school
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 as soon as possible and if they choose to
work
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 they would
study
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 longer and they would be older
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then
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than
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 some of their classmates. To conclude,
students
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 have to choose between
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study
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studying
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 immediately after high
school
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 or
get
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getting
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 some
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experience
experiance
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experience
 at
work
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 before
university
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 but it depends on their character and priority. Some of them want to make
money
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 and get to know new
people
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. Working can improve their skills and they can get a new point of view. Despite the all disadvantages, In my
opinion
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students
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 should try to full-time working because
i
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 can see more positive aspects. But when young
people
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 choose, they have to
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weigh
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weight
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weigh
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 all pros and cons.

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