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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 a rising number of the population are coming down with well-being problems as a consequence of excessive consumption of fast foods. Some people have a view that authorities ought to increase tax on
such
food
 items. For my
part
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 I completely disagree with
this
 view and believe
in
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that imparting
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health-related
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health related
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health-related
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 knowledge,
education
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and education
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 to the citizens and banning junk
food
 items are the best way to deal with
this
 problem. Undoubtedly, it is noteworthy that eating too
much
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 fast
foods
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food
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 leads to
health
illness
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illnesses
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,
food borne
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foodborne
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 diseases
such
 as obesity, overweight, heart disease,
chronic
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and chronic
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health
. To tackle
this
, the government should enhance
overall
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 awareness of citizens towards
this
 problem
by
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 publicity and education than imposing
higher
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a higher
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levy
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 as it will
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increase
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in crease
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increase
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 the disadvantage of middle classes people.
For instance
, in most
of
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the
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countries, there are more than 50% of
middle
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 class and if the authorities impose higher taxes on
food
 items they will be affected
a lots
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.
Therefore
, educating citizens and making them release
about
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 the
health
 issues
drive
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from
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by
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 the excessive consumption of
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fastened
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fastening
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fattening
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food
. From an economic point of view, the counter-argument raised by objectors is that the revenue from the higher tax could improve the country’s healthcare system.
This
 decision could be attributed to the fact that the healthcare system
spend
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 a huge
of
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budget on
population
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the population
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 with diet-related
health
 problems and the levy could help fund
on
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it.
This
 argument is true to some degree;
however
, it is incomplete, what they fail to take into account is that those have caused their own illness because of their choice of consumption and the government does not have to
responsibility
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 to pay or help for the medication. In conclusion, I am convinced that imposing
tax
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 will not help much in solving the
health
 issue for
reasons
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the reasons
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 mentioned above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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