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Is mental strength important for success or is it more important to be strong and fit for success in sport.? Discuss both views and give your opinion

#strength #success #sport
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Some argue that mental
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 is crucial in
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 while other believe
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 more beneficial to have a healthy
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 and proper exercise
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 I will discuss mental strength and having a strong and fit
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 in
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 and give my own opinion. While others don't see mental
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 as crucial in
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 but it actually plays an important role in professional
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. Because when you are mental
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 is bad you can't stay calm and focused.
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, in chess competitions many professional chess players lost the match, because their mental
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 is bad due to toxic people and the community, causing the player to make the wrong move due to
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stress and anxiety.
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, having good mental
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 help you stay
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. Our
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 strength helps us perform better in any sport. Many athlete train and exercise every day to stay in shape.
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 Usain Both run and works out every day to perform at his best, he outruns every competitor because he trains harder than other.
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, workouts to stay in shape helps
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an athlete
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athlete
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 perform better. In conclusion, good mental
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 helps you relax and calm in competition while training to stay in shape helps improve how you perform in every match.
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, athletes should have both mental strength and a fit and strong
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 to archive their best.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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