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Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while others think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In order to get
information
, a few prefer to listen, to
news
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 on the
radio
 and consider it as a viable option over any other medium whereas others watch the
news
 on
television
, and contemplate it as a good choice. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion on, why
television
 is better than
radio
. Many people are of the view that radios are the best choice to get informed about the things happening in society. So,
this
 might be a situation where people have used the
radio
 entirety of their life or their travel in
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 long distances. To give an example, a person in his late sixties would choose
radio
 over
television
 because of his age and an individual driving would choose it as well because while driving it is necessary to focus on the road and cannot watch TV.
On the other hand
, the people who are inclined towards watching
news
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 on
television
 might be of
a
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 view that
radio
 cannot give the
information
as
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it provides because
television
 depicts the
information
 in a combination of audio and visual representation which is interactive.
For instance
, a
television
 set gives details of the
news
 in a video and if the
news
 presenter does not give
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detailed
the
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information
, it can be understood through video and cannot be misinterpreted as it might happen
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radio
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. To conclude, I would say using
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television
 is
better
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 option because it gives
news
 in an interactive and graphical way and cannot be misjudged but in the case of radios it can happen as it may have
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 by a few because of their situations or condition.
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