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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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modern
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 era, labour-saving
such
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also
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 too many different tools
such
 as smartphones are supposed to make
people
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people's
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 lives easier.
although
, some
people
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against
 that these type of devices only make their
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 I give personal opinion and
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contrast
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contrasty
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to begin
, there
are
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 serval reason of supporting
this
 idea.
firstly
,
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 would like to highlight the fact which
make
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makes
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 our
life
 easier
such
 as many
of
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the
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people
 are
doing
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freelancing on
online
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device
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devices
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.
in other words
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worldwide
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worldwide
people
 are
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conference
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 and
doing
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 online jobs
also
 earning handsome salaries through
technology
.
for instance
, my
neighbors
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 are
doing
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freelancing online for different companies and earning well payout by whose companies.
in addition
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different
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tool
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 making better their
life
.
secondly
, many
people
 who are living outside their homelands so they contact
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their
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one
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ones
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 by using that device.
for example
, my father lives in
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Canada
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. but we can communicate
to
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with
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 him easier by using apps like
whatapps
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what apps
 and messager.
on the other hand
, some
people
 argue that
technology
make
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makes
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life
 difficult. in other
people
 view that many getting
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crazy
lazy
 by using
technology
. because most
people
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technology
technolgy
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technology
 they're used to
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 on their bed. to
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, one
my
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 friend is
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 to
used
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using
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technology
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everywhere
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every where
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everywhere
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 and get
lrazy
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crazy
lazy
 all the time.
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furthermore
,
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 would like to outline the more issue of using in daily lifestyle. many
people
having
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 health
issue
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issues
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 in their
life
 because of
technology
.
for example
, many
of
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apply
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teenagers having eye sights problem
by
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from
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 playing
video
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videos
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at in
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in
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an
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ages
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 and in
england
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England
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 10 out of 6
student
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effective
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are effective
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of
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at
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 it . to sum up, some believe that device
make
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makes
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 our
life
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easier
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easies
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easier
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 and
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varies
earies
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easier
 day by day.
on the other hand
, some think that
technology
make
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makes
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people
stress
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stressed
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 in their
life
. but there
are
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is
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 more
benefit
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of
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to
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 using
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technology
technolgy
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technology
 than using
issue
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issues
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.
such
 as easies to
communicate
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communicating
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 and doing
online
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the online
an online
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job
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jobs
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 as well.
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