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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

#people #experimentation #animals #discoveries #experiments #alternatives
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animals
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purpose
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 of
experiments
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On the other hand
, others consider that everything regarding scientific
expermints
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experiments
 should be done on
animals
. I believe that the
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animals
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only way of making scientific discoveries. If they were done on humans, it would lead to unknown and unexpected consequences,
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a
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fatality. The
life
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a human
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human
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 is more significant rather than
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a life
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 of
the
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 animal which died from
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unsuccessful
unseccessful
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unsuccessful
experiments
. Not every one of us is willing to be negatively influenced or to sacrifice our
life
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their
thier
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their
experiments
. There are not many other ways of involving
animals
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the
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experiments
. One way to replace them can be
utilizing
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 rats or insects.
However
, it does not guarantee
a
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trustful data which are received from experimentations. The reason
of
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 the usage of
animals
,
as
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 the body
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construction
consctruction
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construction
 and
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the bacterias
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bacterias
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bacteria
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 of human
being
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beings
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 are quite similar, so it means the outcomes that
the
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human could have would be the same.
For instance
, vaccinations that were created and discovered for treating and
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preventing
perventing
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preventing
 people from different
disease
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diseases
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initially
 experimented on
the
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animals
.
Thus
, scientists will be able to be confident that some injections are not going to lead to any potential hazards. To conclude,
human's
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life
 should not be sacrificed as it has been considered
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a valuable thing
through
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 many decades.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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