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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

#people #experimentation #animals #discoveries #experiments #alternatives
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animals
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purpose
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 should be restricted and it is considered as something negative.
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, others consider that everything regarding scientific
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experiments
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animals
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. I believe that the
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only way of making scientific discoveries. If they were done on humans, it would lead to unknown and unexpected consequences,
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fatality. The
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human
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 is more significant rather than
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 of
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 animal which died from
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unsuccessful
unseccessful
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unsuccessful
experiments
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. Not every one of us is willing to be negatively influenced or to sacrifice our
life
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their
thier
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their
experiments
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. There are not many other ways of involving
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experiments
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. One way to replace them can be
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 rats or insects.
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, it does not guarantee
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trustful data which are received from experimentations. The reason
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,
as
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 the body
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construction
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 and
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the bacterias
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bacterias
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bacteria
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 of human
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beings
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 are quite similar, so it means the outcomes that
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human could have would be the same.
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, vaccinations that were created and discovered for treating and
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preventing
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preventing
 people from different
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initially
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animals
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, scientists will be able to be confident that some injections are not going to lead to any potential hazards. To conclude,
human's
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life
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 should not be sacrificed as it has been considered
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a valuable thing
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 many decades.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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