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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural back ground living together in the same country makes the country to develop faster. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the meantime, many
people
 live in abroad, they think that having
people
 from others
nationalities
 and cultural back ground living together makes the
country
 to develop more quickily. I completely disagree because of some reasons that I mentioned in
this
 eassay. In the one hand,
people
 from less develop
nationalities
 and different cultural live in develop
nationalities
 makes decrease
development
 because the percentage of
development
 changes by
people
 have low income. They have many different problems
such
 as: making friends with
people
 in others
country
, eat different foods, finding the way that earning to live. The result is their
development
 is slow and more slowly.
For instance
, the reseach of Hanoi National university shows that 80 percent of
people
 who live in abroad have many different problems to adjust with new cirrcustance. Even many sudents have "shock cultural" that makes depress or bored.
In addition
, some
countries
 that
development
 economy have social fund quite hight, so many
people
 from less develop nationals to more develop
countries
 result in affect of goverment policy
such
 as: insurrance, unemployment benefits.
This
 makes the
country
 to develop more slowly. An example, over many years some
people
 from Africa to Europe lead to
this
countries
 have the percentage of
development
 is quite slowly. Even many
people
 try to population of new
countries
 that more
development
 than their the
country
. In conclusion,
people
 from different
nationalities
 and cultural living together in the same
country
 makes the
country
 can not develop. So goverment should have suitable policy to decrease
this
 problem.
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