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Some people believe that the extinction of animal species is a natural process and humans should not intervene. Do you agree or disagree?

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Few Individuals assume that the decimation of
animals
 is an inevitable process ,I strongly disagree because we
humans
 are
also
 part of the animal world
although
 we are the most intelligent among them . If we don't take control of
this
 process soon we will be looped in the same chain. We,
humans
, create a lot of pollution in different ways which
affect
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 all sorts of
animals
 including us.
Animals
 are getting extinct because of improper care ,due to which
humans
 are already facing a lot of problems that will create ecological imbalance.The best example is presently we don't have a lot of different variants of cows,horses ,birds ,butterflies and rhinos whereas our previous generation enjoyed these benefits of nature which balanced our ecosystem .Presently we can see that all seasons are out of
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track, we get rain too early or winter too early and so on. We
humans
 as civilizations have gone through many changes, so we can go through these phases as well . As we need to take care of
animals
 it can be done in many ways , funding animal needs or planning your own pet and saving
animals
 are some of them.Let's take a well know example , India was facing a crisis where tigers were getting decimation, in 2012 but soon ,India all together as the country took a few initiatives and as of ,now tigers count is greater than ever in India. In conclusion, we
humans
 begin to need to make sure
animals
 are safe and sound .The inevitable process or chaos is created by us and it
also
 can be stopped by us as well .Indeed if not soon we will be
also
 facing the same inevitable consequences .
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