Some believe that children should start school after the age of 7 while others think that school should begin from a very young age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People's opinion differs as to whether the correct
age
to start schooling is 7 or lower.,
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I agree with the latter viewpoint. Those who argue that students should start studying after the
age
of 7 have their reasons.
Firstly
, the mind is not developed
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early
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. Due to ,
this
they are not able to focus and concentrate on their studies and learn properly.
For example
, In Sweden, grades are improved by 1 point during the
last
3 years after the Government makes 7
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the minimum
age
for getting admission to schools.
Secondly
, if they begin school
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early
age
, it will put extra stress on their mind.
This
stress becomes mental trauma when they turn into an adult.
However
, I sided with those who feel that children should start school at a very young
age
because it will put them a step ahead
than
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who
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late. If Children attend school at
young
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age
, they are able to learn at
young
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age
and gain more knowledge than those who begin late.
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a boy in our street, start going to kindergarten at 4 and now he
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to speak more than the student who
begin
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at
age
of 7.
The another
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reason is that attending
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early
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stage
improve
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their social quality
such
as interaction with others
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friends. In Conclusion, while there are
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reasons
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reasons
believe
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that
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should start after 7, my own view is that it should
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at early
age
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because
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because
it should help them to learn earlier and develop social skills in them.
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