Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or a health club, while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient.
All over the
world
different groups of people opine that the most vital way to have Add a comma
,world
strong
and sportive Add an article
a strong
the strong
body
is to attend a fitness
club or a gym
, while other individuals consider doing everyday activities
such
as using stairs
and walking in the park or street is sufficient. So, in this
essay
I will Add a comma
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explain
explane
both Correct your spelling
explain
view
and give my own opinion.
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Firstly
, in my opinion
using Add a comma
,opinion
stairs
and walking is useful, of course, however
it is not enough Add a comma
,however
for
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to
stay
fit, since every Wrong verb form
staying
person
should do more difficult exercises and activities
such
as swimming, cycling, running, dancing, playing
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and playing
sport
games. Change the noun form
sports
Furthermore
, every individual should join a fitness
centre or a gym
to do different useful exercises like boxing, doing yoga, pilates, using training instruments, playing Correct your spelling
football
footbal
, basketball and so on. Correct your spelling
football
Thus
, every person
can stay fit, because of Correct your spelling
discipline
dicipline
and doing different beneficial Correct your spelling
discipline
activities
. In fact, just walking and climbing stairs
are
not enough for staying fit , actually.
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is
Secondly
, I will discuss advantages
of attending Correct article usage
the advantages
health
club. In fact, if each Correct article usage
a health
do
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does
sport
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sports
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activities
activites
regularly, Correct your spelling
activities
then
this
person
will have fit
and sportive Add an article
a fit
the fit
body
. Moreover
, every person
should go to the gym
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or
ore
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or
fitness
centre with their children, with their family. Thus
, each will have healthy
lifestyle and stay fit. To give illustrate, in winter people usually do not have Add an article
a healthy
opportunity
for cycling, Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
however
they can go Add a comma
,however
the
ice skating or figure skating Correct article usage
apply
instead
of cycling. I mean even in the winter every person
does not should stay at home and be lazy, instead
of this
they have to do different beneficial activities
to stay fit and have excellent health and sportive body
.
In conclusion, in my opinion, walking and climbing stairs
are useful activities
of
course, Add the comma(s)
,of
however
it is not enough Add the comma(s)
,however
for
stay fit. In fact, every Change preposition
to
person
should attend a gym
or a fitness
club to do different beneficial activities
, thus
they will have strong and excellent health and body
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