Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or a health club, while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient.
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fitness
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stairs
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person
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activities
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gym
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football
footbal
, basketball and so on. Correct your spelling
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discipline
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stairs
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are
not enough for staying fit , actually.
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health
club. In fact, if each Correct article usage
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do
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sport
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activities
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activities
then
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healthy
lifestyle and stay fit. To give illustrate, in winter people usually do not have Add an article
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activities
to stay fit and have excellent health and sportive Use synonyms
body
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In conclusion, in my opinion, walking and climbing Use synonyms
stairs
are useful Use synonyms
activities
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course, Add the comma(s)
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however
it is not enough Add the comma(s)
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stay fit. In fact, every Change preposition
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person
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gym
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fitness
club to do different beneficial Use synonyms
activities
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thus
they will have strong and excellent health and Linking Words
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