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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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It is a known fact that nowadays authorities of most cities encourage builders to develop
buildings
 in
such
 a way, that they will be able to give as many places as they could, and one of the obvious solutions is just to make
buildings
 look like skyscrapers. Only a little number of cities have laws that deny constructing
buildings
 of more than several floors.
Although
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 I have spent all my childhood in
such
 a place in the countryside in a two-storey building and still have warm memories about it, I truly believe that the future is high-rise
buildings
 and that
this
 solution is much better than shallow development.
First
 of all, constructing tall
buildings
 is not only about places where
people
 live, it is
also
 about how they would live. Let me explain
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 when the city architect decides that some
area
 should be developed, he decided
also
 how
people
 would commute to their work (infrastructure planning), where they should leave their kids (kindergarten placing), how
people
 would spend their leisure activity (parks, cinemas, theatres, etcetera), and so one. As you can see, in that way could be improved all the city, not only one small
area
.
Secondly
, if there are a lot of
people
 in a particular
area
, many places take care of them. Many businesses have been opened just to help
people
 to solve their everyday problems. So, the more inhabitants live in the neighbourhood, the more entrepreneurs could be grown there to provide dwellers with more services.
Consequently
, when cities create housing areas of
this
 type, the government helps to improve the economy of the country. Despite the fact that a lot of
people
 prefer to live in the countryside with the wider
area
 of land, our lives could be improved dramatically thanks to dense tall
buildings
 and
people
 who live there.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
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