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Discipline is ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some think discipline should be the responsibility of teachers

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Given that "Discipline" is the individual's reflection of his personality, it is an important trait, schools are key in inculcating
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 in a student. On the other side of the coin, schools are finding difficulty in imparting
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 key quality to the students being influenced by the advances in communication and digital technology of present times. In the face of
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 challenges, it becomes imperative that teachers play a key role in bringing discipline to an individual's psyche, by driving
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 rules and regulations as needed and strictly enforcing the same so that each of us, proves to be a responsible citizen, that we are expected to be.
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, the kind of gadgets and information
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 readily accessible to the learning lot, has triggered their sense of experimentation.
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, many a time leads to inappropriate and unruly behaviour that becomes unacceptable by the larger population. One
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 example is the possible pranks played by noted people for fun, which some students try imitating blindly, causing harm to themselves and others.
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, there is an increasing need to enforce the right behaviour and nurture responsible actions that mankind expects.
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 can be effectively done by our teachers, who can effect proper behaviour during early age among the students.
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 individuals, when they grow up in turn take up the task of maintaining and propagating morality in the social fabric. More so, with the teachers' efforts, we can realise a bright society
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 disciplined and ready to uphold human values.
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