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Some people are of the view that only university education can ensure success, whereas many others oppose this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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different opinion towards learning while a group of human argue that college training is important
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 remaining believes that practical studies should be given consideration. In
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 with, University studies help an individual with plenty of opportunities mainly because of like-minded people in the class.
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, he/she will enjoy a variety of jobs once graduation is completed, and they would be enjoying career growth much faster in comparison with a man who does not have a college degree. For an instance, one of my colleagues got promoted to
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 manager only because he is a postgraduate, while
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 a guy who completed secondary schooling with 4 years of experience is finding difficulties in getting career growth.
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, practical learning helps a human if the particular individual is vested with a physical job rather than a technical one. How does it favour the person ? On-the-job training is mainly to mould an individual with the right set of skills
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 those people find the work easy in comparison with a theoretical individual.
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, recently a lot of diploma colleges offer theory-based classes to become a plumber
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, a human who has real-life experience is given most of the jobs in society. I opine that both are essential , a job which is done with physical abilities needs more training practically rather than giving classes on it,
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, a banker should learn from the teacher about the basics. To conclude, understanding what is a person's desire helps him/her to choose the mode of culture.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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