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Explain some of the ways in which human are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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It is some argued that
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 reason effect
on
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 the climate.
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the situation, and the responsibility to protect the
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scène
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 of both the
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 and individuals. On the one hand,
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authority
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 plays a vital role in environmental protection. Our
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 is affected by climate change; it brings
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 a great deal of serious damage,
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 as floods,
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and prolonged
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 droughts. The law builds dams for citizens to
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the prevention
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 of natural
disaster
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disasters
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.
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, factories have to comply with
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 hygiene regulations because these emissions have a detrimental impact on the habitat.
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, cutting down trees illegally is an action
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 to environmental degradation. In order to reduce deforestation, the
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 should impose some new laws against forest clearance.
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, individuals make a significant contribution to protecting the
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. Exhaust gases from private
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transport
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 are causing severe damage to environmental pollution;
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, citizens are urged to use means of transport,
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 as bike cycle, electrical
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cars
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.
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, Taiwan is using
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 of public cycling because it is environmentally friendly.
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, everyone is becoming aware of protecting the surroundings because poor environmental quality will influence human health. To illustrate, Vietnam is one of the nations that has millions of tons of plastic waste,
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 as bottles,
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and bags
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;
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,
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 should shift toward using environmentally friendly products. In conclusion, the problem of protecting the
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 has been
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tackled
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 in many places thanks to the law and ordinary
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. The efforts and cooperation of individuals and the regime help the setting to be cleaner.
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