In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In their advertising,
businesses
nowdays
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sometimes stress that their
products
are new in some way. From my point of view, some
businesses
want to have good
products
to give to the people, but
usually
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they worry
about
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that
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their
products
are newer than some
other's
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other
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businesses
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businesses'
business's
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products
.
In
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I
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think it is a negative development, because when
businesses
stress about the quality of their
products
, sometimes they do something wrong
while
they are producing
ther
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them
. It is good when
the
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businesses
take care of and look after their
products
but with a limit.
According to
some experts, when you take a lot of care of something, you will probably do some things, about it, wrong. From my own experience, I was trying to
make
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three school projects, which my teachers asked me to do, and despite my hard work and because I was stressed about the projects I had to do,
finally
failed because I had made a lot of mistakes.
To sum up
,
businesses
nowdays
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should not stress about their
products
being new in some way.
Besides
that
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that,
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they should calm down and be careful
on
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about
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what they are producing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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