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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for telhe environment. What damages does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #telhe #environment #damages #government #individuals
Over the past few decades, there has been a drastic enhancement in
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usage
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usuage
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usage
 of
plastic
items
such
 as
plastic
 polybags,
plastic
 food packaging materials,
plastic
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and plastic
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 water bottles. One cannot deny the fact that
immense
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 use of anything and everything brings some adverse consequences. In
this
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harmful
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the harmful
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 effects of
such
 excessive
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usage
use
usuage
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usage
 of
plastic
 materials and provide mitigates to reduce its impact. It is true that
plastic made
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 packaging materials are
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convenient
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convinient
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convenient
 and cheaper way of delivering
the
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breads
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bread
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 and drinks to the customer.
Also
, these packaging
material
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materials
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 are generally for
one
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one-time
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time
 use and major concern arises at the
time
 of
disposing
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such
items
.
For instance
, a study conducted by various researchers declared that
number
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 of masses dump these
plastic
 bags and bottles in water and
it's
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 toxic elements contaminated the water.
This
 is ultimately resulting in
extinction
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the extinction
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 of various sea species and animals.
Furthermore
, if
such
 plastics are burned, chemicals released from polymers
in
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 land
causes
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 soil erosion or soil pollution. Apart from
this
, it
also
 results in air pollution when burned.
Consequently
, these air pollutants
causes
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 serious health concerns to the nearby inhabitants. Irrespective of several restrictions imposed by
government
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the government
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,
plastic
 packaging
items
 are still available in
consumer
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the consumer
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 market. I would like to suggest that
government
 should levy high penal charges on the producers who manufacture
such
items
 and provide subsidy to the manufacturing concerns
who
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 promotes eco-friendly products
such
 as cloth bags.
In addition
 to
this
,
government
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the government
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 should organise seminars in colleges and other educational institutions to spread awareness among
public
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the public
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 about
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 effects of polymers and plastics.
Beside
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this
, it is the duty of every individual to follow the rules and regulations formulated by
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the government
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time
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 to
time
 strictly. In the light of
above
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 discussion, I would like to recommend that a strong will and concerted efforts of every individual and
government
 can go a long way in tackling
this
 serious issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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