In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done in this problem?

Technology has developed in past decades and has found its way through agriculture. It has helped humans to produce more
food
in hopes of solving the
hunger
and malnutrition problems, but unfortunately many cases of
hunger
are still being reported.
This
essay will point out a possible cause of
this
problem and a probable solution. Governments are too focused on increasing the production of
food
that they have forgotten to find new ways of allocating them equally to all of the
world
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.
Therefore
, even though the amount is more than enough, only certain groups of people living in certain countries which are mostly rich and developed
ones
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have access to these nutritious foods, and the rest are long forgotten.
For instance
, people in the USA are enjoying various
food
products from genetically modified ones to organic ones, but kids in Africa are suffering from beriberi, a B1 vitamin insufficiency disease. To address
this
issue, Organizations like WHO, the world’s health organization, are playing an important role in reporting the
areas
suffering from
hunger
, and what is left to do is to make sure produced
food
reaches them. In order to do that, these foods could be frozen and transported by
airplanes
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. Elan Mask, the founder of SpaceX, has
also
invented transportation capsules called “Hyperloop Alpha” which could be used for transporting
food
to suffering
areas
without the need to freeze them in less than an hour. To sum up,
although
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the advent of new ways of
food
production the amount produced has increased,
hunger
still exists in certain parts of the world because of the lack of focus on finding ways to send
this
food
to
areas
poor in agriculture. One way to solve
this
is to freeze
food
and send them by existing
airplanes
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, or newly invented Hyperloops of SpaceX to
areas
suffering from malnutrition which are reported by organizations like WHO.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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