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Some people claim that there are more disadvandages of car ownership than advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

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It is believed by a wide section of society that buying a
car
 has
numerous
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 negatives than positives, while others think
otherwise
. Privacy and convenience are the two major contributing factors towards thinking that owning a
car
 is highly advantageous. Rising pollution and
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maintenance
maintainence
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maintenance
 costs,
on the other hand
, attributes towards its drawbacks.
This
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The
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 following essay,
however
, will elaborate
both
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on both
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 of them using relevant examples and provide a logical conclusion.
First
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The first
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 and foremost benefit of purchasing
own
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your own
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four wheeler
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four-wheeler
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 is convenience and safety. To
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elaborate
elborate
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elaborate
, with the help of
own
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our own
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vehicle
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,vehicle
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 we can travel to any place anytime without thinking twice whereas in
case
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the case
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 of public transport we have to consider its schedule.
Moreover
, It has been observed from worldwide statistics that
the
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people who
travels
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in
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on
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 their own four-wheeler have thin chances
to
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of
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met
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 an accident.
Therefore
, It can be easily said that
car
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the car
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 is by far the safest mode of transport.
On the other hand
, there are several pitfalls of having a personal
car
.
Primary
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The primary
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 one is that it
inccur
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incur
 high
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maintenance
maintainence
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maintenance
 costs. In past years, owing to
high
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the high
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 consumption of petrol and
disel
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diesel
 the running and
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maintenance
maintainence
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maintenance
 expenses of owning a
car
 skyrocketed globally. What's more, the air quality index has been plunged in metropolitan cities worldwide.
This
 shows that our environment is facing
wrath
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the wrath
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 of heavy usage of personal vehicles which
emitts
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emits
emitted
 harmful gases
in
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into
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 the atmosphere. In conclusion, despite having uncountable benefits of owning a
car
such
 as privacy, safety and convenience, its detrimental impact on our planet can not be neglected.
Therefore
, it is high time individuals should switch back to
traditional
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the traditional
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mode
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modes
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 of travelling
such
 as cycles and electric vehicles which will not only help people to gain health benefits
,
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 but
also
 preserve natural resources for
our
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apply
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future generations.
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