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Some people say that social media is a digital drug that has left many people addicted enhanced their lots of valuable time while others say social media has Enable Connectivity with the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion on the topic.

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The Bar
Chart
 illustrates the
duration
 of telephone calls from different kinds of
telephone
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the telephone
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 during the period of 1995 to 2002 in the UK. Overall, the
chart
 of mobile call time has a steady
rise
 while national and international fixed
line
 calls found
slight
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a slight
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rise
 and local fixed
line
 call
duration
 indicated
decline
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a decline
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 in comparison to the beginning year. As exhibited in the
chart
, local fixed
line
 calls took more than 70
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 1995 while national and international fixed
line
 and mobile (all calls) were below 40 and 10
billions
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billion
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minutes
 respectively.
Furthermore
, the bar
chart
 represented the
duration
 of local calls from 1995 to 2002 specified variation while in 1998 and 1999 levelled off and the following years in
declining
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a declining
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 trend.
On the other hand
, national and international fixed
line
 calls and mobile
call’s
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call
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 (all calls) data trends stipulated a stable
rise
 where fixed
line
 call data increased from about 35 to 60
billions
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billion
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minutes
 from 1995 to 2002.
Likewise
, mobile call
duration
 shows a
more
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sharp
rise
 in that period. In 1995 mobile calls
duration
 was less than 5 billion
minutes
 which soared to nearly 45 billion
minutes
 in 7 years from 1995 to 2002.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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