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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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Some
people
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belief
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 that all
students
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 should study what they
interested
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 in,
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, there are
people
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 who think that
students
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 must learn
science
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 and technology. In my opinion, young
human
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humans
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 should study only
that
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what
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 they love.
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 essay will examine both sides. On the one hand, in the future subjects like (
science
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, math, chemistry and physic) can solve global issues. Nowadays, many citizens consider the possibility to resolve
problem
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require
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 exact
science
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 along with mathematical reasoning. As matter of fact, in 21 century all the general challenges emphasize
on
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the technique area.
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, at the moment the most famous technical company NASA are colonizing mars as well as
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 to find a place for
people
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 to live.
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, they are making
a
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new modern technology
as
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 new radio communications, missiles and other vital items.
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, these things can boost
capability
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 condition
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, If a young student will study
subject
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 he does not want, it will lead to
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. After all, many
students
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 have lost their talent and motivation.
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, they are not efficient for the world along with not improve the environment. Because of that, a lot of undergraduates lose themselves in
the
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life and eventually can not realize their potential.
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, in Kazakhstan , many
students
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 choose a profession looking at
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,
because
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and because
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 of
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, the unemployment rate increase. In conclusion, these days subjects like math,
science
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 and others play a high role in the earth,
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however
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 the
people
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 desire should be
on
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 the
first
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 place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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