These days people in some countries are living in a throwaway society which means people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what impacts can it have?

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Nowadays, the rate of replacing our personal devices or properties has been raised enormously, whether these staff still work and apply our needs or not .
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on
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's behaviour
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the results regards that on the environment.
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and foremost, let’s take an example of these devices as cell phones which have
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new
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every year, whether the price can be afforded or not for all
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the attempt to change comes up in some
people
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's minds soon as they discover something new emerged to indulge their instincts,
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they want to be the
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one to own these devices as kind of bragging that causes mental disease need a remedy.
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, there will be a negative financial
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on their life because they will reach the point, they can’t afford to own every single new device as soon its launched on the market and
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will feel like broke or poor
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will cause a psychological
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on their life drive them to commit a crime
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as a robbery that raised criminal records. Another
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on the environment
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is once the demand for new items increases ,the consumption of raw material increase which comes from our natural environments
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as soil, tree and metals
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of that strange phenomena will appear like desertification and increasing of global warming. In conclusion, the need for our life is related to our commitment to ourselves toward the
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generation either by funding them or saving the environment because our resources are limited so we have to be careful towards our instincts and the way to fulfil them.
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