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Plastic is destroying the natural ecosystem in the ocean. What are the problems associated with this issues and what are the possible solutions?

#plastic #ecosystem #ocean
Plastic
, that
have
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 ejected
to
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into
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 the
ocean
 leads
devastating
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to devastating
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 effects
to
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on
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 the hydro-ecosystem.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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some
problems
 like destroy of sea flora and fauna and realizes of toxic
gases
 and offer solutions for these
problems
such
 as
stop
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stopping
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 throwing out
plastic
manufacture
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manufacturing
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to
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in
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 the
ocean
 as
solution
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a solution
the solution
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 for 1st
problem
 and
solution
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the solution
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 to the 2nd is recycling
plastic
.
Plastic
 takes a long time to decompose. Because of
this
 characteristic
plastic
 will swim
on
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in
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ocean
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the ocean
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about
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for about
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 2 or 3 centuries. Fishes and other different marine life can confuse food with
plastic
that
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which
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 leads to much amount of death among marine life. If
plastic
 was not eaten it leads to
another
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other problems
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problem
 like realizes of toxic
gases
 that dangerous to people and animals. When
plastic
 is decomposing so
gases
 like methane and ethylene realizing into the atmosphere.
For example
, these
gases
one
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are one
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 of a cause of
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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 effect on Earth
also
 these
gases
 give
bad
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a bad
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 influence
to
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on
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the
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apply
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human’s
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human
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organism
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organisms
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. How humanity can prevent catastrophic
result
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results
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? Each
problem
 has
itself
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its
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solution
. These
problems
 are
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no
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not
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no
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an exception
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exception
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exceptions
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. To solute 1st
problem
 humanity must stop
throw
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throwing
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 out
plastic
to
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into
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 the
ocean
 and other places.
Solution
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The solution
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 for 2nd
problem
 can perform if people will comply
acts
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with acts
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 that
was
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were
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 told
at
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in
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 1st
solution
. It is recycling of litter including
plastic
.
This
solution
 can help to stop realizes of toxic
gases
 economy resources.
For example
, in
Europe
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,Europe
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 thanks to
recycling
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the recycling
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 of
plastic
 lowered
realizes
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realize
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 of toxic
gases
about
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by about
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 75%. To conclude,
plastic
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 is
indispensable
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an indispensable
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 part of our life that can give different dangerous
problems
.
However
, everything
on
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is on
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 people’s
hand
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hands
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 and if we will care
to
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about
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environment
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the environment
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 all of
problems
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the problems
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 will be just a theory.
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