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Air pollution is one of the largest problems the world is facing today. What are some causes of air pollution and what measures can be proposed to solve this problem?

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Humans are facing
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plenty number of threats today and
air
 pollution is one of the biggest.
This
 essay will analyse the principal causes of it which are emissions from
cars
 and harmful
gases
 produced by factories and suggest
such
 solutions as
popularization
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 of electro vehicles and
installation
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the installation
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 of
filters
 on the exhaust pipes of metallurgical fabrics. Different car emissions and CO2 and methane factory
gases
 lead
air
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 pollution. To start with,
everyday
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using
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cars
 based on a fossil fuels
engine
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engines
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 provokes
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 increase in the level of bad
gases
 in the atmosphere and
quality
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 of
air
 gets low.
Gases
 that appear due to the activities of the
powerplants
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also
 affect the purity of the
air
.
For instance
, according to 2016 research, Russian Federation`s enterprises emitted more than 1560
millions
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of
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tons of carbon dioxide which is a record among all countries in the world. Fortunately, humanity thinks
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 appropriate solutions to these problems, which consist
in
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 the introduction of electric
cars
 into everyday use and
attachment
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 of filtration tubes over default pipes for waste
gases
. The production and sale of
cars
 powered by electric batteries, rather than fuel-powered engines, will almost completely eliminate exhaust
gases
 from entering the atmosphere.
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add
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, putting
filters
 on the outlet pipes of factories will
also
 have a positive effect on the
air
. Studies have shown that the use of special
filters
 has reduced the release of heavy metals into the atmosphere by almost 44
percent
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 All in all,
reasons
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of
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the
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air
 pollution with
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automobile emissions and harming enterprise
gases
 included could be solved by making electric
cars
 more famous and wearing
filters
 on the metallurgical cylinders.
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