Today, some people think that universities should accept equal numbers of female and male in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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think that universities should accept
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number of
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females
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and
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in
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every
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every
subject. But
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are not agree
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and believe that
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points but these are valid theoretically and
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equal
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number of male and female in every subject could bring more
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benefit
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and change
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everyone think.
First
, they can promote gender equality, fair
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created in universities,
female
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can learn and do majors for men.
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can choose jobs
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.
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, they can
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break
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social taboos with that
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, sexism
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in life. But all of these
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actions theoretically, everything cannot change easily. There is no guarantee that it will work in practice.
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, almost 50% of women are well in arts and painting.
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, few men took a keen interest in
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university
choose
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equal
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number of male and
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female
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females
, the men will leave the
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as getting less
interact
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with
this
major and they don’t have talent in
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reason, it should depend
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up on
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the skill of
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to get admitted to the university. It should not be based on any particular gender.
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priorities
priorties
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prioritise
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of candidates. So,
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believe that
this
is an unacceptable
policy
. They can freedom to choose
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the majors
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they want. It will make more
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for everyone to prove of
ability
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abilities
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.
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unacceptable that
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. I think that their
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career
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career
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their skill not by their gender.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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