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Some people prefer the lifestyle and activities offered when living in a cold environment. Others prefer a hot environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many humans selected living in
a
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 coldest atmosphere and they suggested
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 is
situation
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to
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 other
indevelidual
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individual
.
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, majorities
people
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 prefer to sizzling milieu because they adore
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 location. From my point of view, it is hot whether worthwhile for mankind because there are many
sun
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 days in my nation. These days, some
people
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 argue that
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sunny nature is extremely beneficial and funny than cold
environment
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 because they do a number of activities
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 sitting.
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, they said that
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this
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environment
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very
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 useful for
human's
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human
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 health because when
people
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 live in
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a
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 hot days country, they savour
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nature
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natural
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 foods because a lot of fruits and vegetables
growing
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grow
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 up in
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a
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 heated boiling atmosphere.
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,
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sunshine
really
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 valuable for mankind's conduct. Take
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, according to the doctor's search
human's
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 body take need 35
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per cent
precent
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per cent
substance
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of substance
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 from the sunshine.
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, it is believed by some
people
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, cold climate countries have less dust than
hotcountries
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hot countries
host countries
, so many
people
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 find it comfortable and beneficial to live in
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 an
environment
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 because it is comfortable for everyone to work or study in cool weather. If
people
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 work in hot weather, they may sweat a lot.
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,
people
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 living in cooler climates are less likely to suffer from respiratory diseases because cooler climates have less dust.
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,
people
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 suffering from
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 diseases are advised to go to mountain slopes and cool places because the air in
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 places is very clean. In conclusion, some
people
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 like warm environments because they can be very funny.
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, some
people
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 believe that living in a cold
environment
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 is beneficial for everyone. I think it is better to live in a warm
environment
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 than to live in a cold
environment
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 because
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warm weather gives energy to mankind.
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