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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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I would think virtual classes are taking over the academy by storm, it is doing it by having a lot of perks with
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this
Correct determiner usage
these

It seems that determiner use may be incorrect here.

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on the other hand
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
Correct your spelling
traditional
tradiational
Correct your spelling
traditional

If you don’t want tradiational to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

education
are
Change the verb form
is

The plural verb are does not appear to agree with the singular subject tradiational education. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 the root of all sources that we are having in
Information
Add an article
the Information
an Information

The noun phrase Information age seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 age, which can't be replaced by any means. we will discuss
the
Remove the article
apply

It is unlikely that your sentence needs the article the before both. Consider deleting the article.

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both assessment
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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with in
Correct your spelling
within

The word with in seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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 the below essay.
To begin
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 with, institutions are taking full advantage
over
Change preposition
of

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 the amount of technology that they can use to provide preaching for
there
Correct your spelling
their

The word there doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 applicants in
this
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pandemic
pandamic
Correct your spelling
pandemic

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, because of that the surge of online classes
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is

It seems that the verb are does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 inevitable,
along
Correct word choice
and along

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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