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Explain the positive and negative aspects of international tourism.

#aspects #tourism
Nowadays,
majority
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 of
peoples
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people
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concern
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 about
an
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the
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 environment. The arrival of foreign
tourism
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tourists
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 is one of the major problems.
On the other hand
, there are many advantages
from
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tourism
 as well.
This
 essay will explain both pros and cons of the arrival of foreign
tourism
.
Firstly
, the benefits of foreign
tourism
 have many advantages
to
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for
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 the country. Foreign
tourism
 can generate revenue for the country’s economy, as well as export agricultural products and manufacturing vehicle parts. An advantage can refer to the increase in wealth and quality of life for local
peoples
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people
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 in rural
areas
.
For example
, foreign
tourism
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tourists
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 who visit a rural area will create a high potential to stimulate local economic growth and job creation rate.
In addition
,
tourism
also
 has the advantage of restoring historic sites and cultures.
However
, foreign
tourism
 can lead to some negative impacts, that are caused in most cases, the tourist destination always being popular in the same
areas
.
For example
, Bangkok, Tokyo, Paris, and New York. These are an example of popular tourist spots. The capacity for tourists in these
areas
 may cause more pollution and destroy the natural environment.
Moreover
,
tourism
 can raise property prices near popular
areas
, which will make locals migrate from the cities and gain more non-local populations in these
areas
, which contributes to economic leakage. In conclusion, foreign tourists consider both advantages and disadvantages for the country. These can be prevented by policies and regulations from the government for controlling
of
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natural environments,
pollutions
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pollution
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, and non-local populations. Explain the positive and negative aspects of international
tourism
.
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