Some people think that its is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,cities are developing and beautifying day by day. A few individuals want to live within the urban,
others
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while others
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believe that life within the farmland is better,I think that living in the
city
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and out of the urban has its own benefits.
In
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essay will discuss both sides and my own viewpoint will be stated. On the one hand,
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living
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in the
city
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has more advantages.Every year, different
buildingscan
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buildings can
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of restaurants,offices,
clothing
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and clothing
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stores.
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creates great opportunities for people living in the
city
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.
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, the
downtowns
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downtown
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has educational complexes for your profession.Most universities and institutes are located in
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city
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the city
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center
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.
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,living in
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apply
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urban has its disadvantages.
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,it can be polluted air
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the
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downtown because of factories,if I am not mistaken,Tashkent is
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the fifth largest
city
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in terms of air pollution.
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, the benefits of rural areas are greater.
A fresh
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air in the countryside
are
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is
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beneficial to human health,
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,the quiet and
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beautiful
beatiful
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beautiful
nature of the village is one of its wonderful features.
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Furthermore
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,the positive sides,there are
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downsides to living in a village.There are not many opportunities to study and limited a lot of facilities for local people
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here.
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,internet speeds in the countryside are not good to attend online classes today. Overall,there are positive and negative sides to living in urban and rural areas.Personally,I sometimes prefer to live in both places.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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