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Volunteer work organised by middle schools brings more benefits than problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#volunteer #work #middle #schools
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Volunteer
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work
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 has been promoted in many schools, and even has been considered to be a requirement for graduation in someplace.
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 it may have an adverse impact on
students
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 to some extent, unpaid
work
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 is beneficial for participants and local communities.
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students
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, they can improve their life
skills
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 by doing voluntary
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. There are always some challenging tasks in
volunteer
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work
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, which can provide teenagers with an opportunity to solve complex problems and
further
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 encourage them to hone their abilities.
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, some
students
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 may fail to acquire a variety of important life
skills
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 because of these
skills
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' practical nature, which means they are difficult to learn from lessons.
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, voluntary
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 can act as an essential subject by giving
students
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 a chance to learn new knowledge. Another benefit of
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work
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 is that it can serve these people in need and help to build a harmonious
community
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.
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 service,
such
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 as helping local peers in need, is an important type of
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work
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.
By helping
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 local people in need, it can be a great chance to meet new friends and communicate with neighbourhoods. Not only participants of
community
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 service, but
also
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 the whole
community
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 can benefit from it.
On the other hand
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, we cannot overlook the possibility that sometimes
volunteer
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work
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 is not well-organised and is a waste of time for
students
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. With stressful study plans, some high school
students
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 need to finish their
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work
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 on weekends. Some kinds of unpaid
work
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 may be easy but onerous to finish.
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,
students
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 may find it difficult to manage their time and concentrate on study. In summary, I hold the opinion that
volunteer
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work
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 is
helpful
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 to improve
students
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' problem-solving
skills
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, even if it needs to pay time and energy.
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