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nowadays the increasing of garbage (waste) is a real concern. why is this happening? What can be done to solve this problem?

#garbage #waste #concern
It is hard to deny that nowadays the
increasing
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of
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 garbage
do
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does
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 cause a series
problems
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of problems
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 which
comes
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come
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 to a serious problem that many
people
concerned
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 about. There are lots of
the
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things
 that
people
 tend to just throw away without ultimately
use
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 and turn
it
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to
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into
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 trash,
such
 as clothes , bags as well as food. So
i
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 would state two
mainly
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reason
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reasons
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 from my prospect in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with,
one
 of the mainly
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reason
reson
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reasons
 should be the
high speed
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development
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 of
the
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technology ,
people
 tend to be hard to satisfy with the same thing ,
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such
sush
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such
 as the same style of clothes and the product which are not the latest version .since the high technology make all the
products
is
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 produced
more
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cheaper and
more
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faster,
people
 would have more
chioces
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choices
 since they are
more
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cheaper with the manufacture ,than the past for all the
things
 that use in our daily
life
 , in
this
 way ,
people
 would like to buy
one
 thing with different
apperance
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appearance
 which have the same function ,
such
 as shoes ,even though
one
 pair of the same function shoes is enough for the daily use.
On the other hand
 ,
people
 are easier to buy the
things
 that they do not need or like in
this
 world
that
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 all
kind
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 of
the
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advertisements
are
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 fully fill with our daily
life
 , it is
obviously
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 to see all the advertisement
is
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persuading you to buy the
products
 that they recommend since all the company need to make great profits, but the effects and the looks in the pictures or the videos may be different with the
pratical
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practical
products
 , and
people
 who like to keep the pace with the fast change world
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especially the young
people
 which means the fast fashion would be popular, all the
things
 are more
easiler
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easier
 to get and the price
are
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is
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 more
afforable
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affordable
 ,
people
whi
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who
 buy the wrong
things
 that do not meet
thie
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the
this
 expectation , just tend to throw it away and buy something new , just a circle with more and more waste in
this
 way. Since the reasons are clear , the solutions are more clearer to see ,
one
 of the
solution
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solutions
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 is to solve the advertisement which spread
the
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unmatching
products
 or fake information , it is should be
launch
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 a law by governments to standardize the information that all the
seller
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sellers
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 need to obey ,
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another
anothoer
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another
 solution should
be raise
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 the awareness of the consumer to notice it is their duty to protect the
enviornmrnt
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environment
 we live , and realise what they really need and live a more comfortable
life
 without
watse
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waste
water
 .
from
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In
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 my personal view ,
this
 action should be taken by the schools that could add some
course
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courses
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 to help children think highly of protecting
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our
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out
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our
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 planet and live a simple but better
life
 .
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