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Some individuals argue people should buy only local products rather than foreign products. do you agree or disagree

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I do agree with the idea of buying local
products
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 rather than foreign
products
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. In the following
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 I am going to explain why I agree.
First
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 of
all
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 it is value for money to purchase
goods
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 locally, buying local produce is cheaper than buying foreign
goods
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 because a lot of money will have been paid for the
goods
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 to be delivered to the local markets, so business owners will want to recover back all that capital by making reasonable profits
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 their
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 will be more pricy at the market. For, instance, if a business owner from South Africa
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 clothes from China to sell in his country, that stock will be more expensive at the market than the
goods
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 for another South African enterprise owner who orders his
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 that are made locally.
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, buying locally creates jobs in the community, and work in the production and retail sectors will be created unlike, buying internationally, where the creation of jobs will happen in a foreign land ,for, example , in ,China there are a lot of factories and industries that produce stuff
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 sold to other countries, and people that are employed in those departments are the local Chinese people. In conclusion, buying locally boost the economy of the nation.The country will be able to sustain itself through indigenous production.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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