Some people think computer and internet are important in children's study, but others think schools and teachers are important? Discuss both sides.

I think that the
internet
and the
computer
are important for
education
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of children because at the
moment
teachers
don't teach their lessons in schools. Let's discuss two sides
First
of all, at the
moment
, to find information the
internet
and the
computer
come to our help
to
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,
therefore
we all love to use the
internet
. And the
internet
can find any news and information. Even the
internet
can find lessons for any
subjects
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You Tube
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For example
, I am at the
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if
i
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don't have money
a
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book
then
i
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just read it through the
internet
and
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is solve
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.
In addition
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internet
and
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computer
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pandemic,
then
we can't study at all communicate,
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with friends and classmates.
However
,
i
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think that at the
moment
schools and
teachers
this
is just show-offs who just sit and go,
but
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of
course
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some
teachers
are very good
teachers
their
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lessons but most are bad
teachers
.
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, in my school teacher require uniforms and attendance they are not interested in learning, so
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only go to school in order to
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with my friends and play
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or dare with them. In conclusion, from my point of view,
i
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think that the
internet
and the
computer
are
important
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than schools and
teachers
,
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because now many people study with the
internet
, even prepare for
studies
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their studies
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themselves and at
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now even
teachers
to
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ask for help
on
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the
internet
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