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Some people think that work is the most important thing in people’s life. Without the success of a career, life becomes meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought that a distinguished career is a pathway to a brighter future whereas
life
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 becomes worthless without achieving success at work. In my opinion, despite the importance of success in all aspects of
life
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, job satisfaction and progression is supreme to that. To start, jobs consume almost the time and energy of workers.
People
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 tend to sacrify toward reaching higher positions and getting promoted in an attempt to live a healthy and satisfying
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.
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, a pleasant career enables the worker to have free time to be around his beloved ones and practice his hobbies
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 living a balanced
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,
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, it is a source of high income
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 necessary to meet his demands.
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, an unsatisfying job is detrimental and can lead to health issues related to stress and depression
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 as headaches and hypertension.
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, the public can still suffer despite having a good career.
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 is due to the lack of enormous elements that contributes to one's happiness and are with equivalent priority. being surrounded by a supportive and caring family and friends is a blessing, but often we don't recognize that or living healthy without complaining about illnesses is at the topmost.
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,
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 can be meaningful not only on a personal level but
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, because giving to others through charity work or looking after
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 in need can provide self-satisfaction.
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, a huge percentage of successful and wealthy
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 are major contributors or co-founders of charity organizations that aim to alleviate
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's suffering. To sum up, work progression is one of the top priorities nowadays
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 leading to living healthy and pleasantly.
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 there is some major component in
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 worthy;
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 believe that job success is the key to joy.
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